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Singularity

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sin·gu·lar·i·ty: • something that is singular — of or relating to
a separate person or thing distinguished by superiority • a point
or region in spacetime infinitely distorted by gravitational forces
and which is held to be the final state of matter


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5.


I never got to tell you

the
world
has
ended


4.


in the beginning
a bang

in the end
a bang


3.


Wed 20:08 DST
we were just served dinner
then it happened:

You are
leaving.

it was so sudden
I didn't get to tell you

when I got home
it wasn't my home

it's
cold
dark
space


2.


once it collapsed
all matter in the universe
ends with it

the gravity
consumes everything

there's
nothing
past
this
point


1.


I never got to tell you

you were
the one
that ever
mattered

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Updated 11-13-2010 at 03:21 AM by Haunted

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  1. DanielBenoit's Avatar
    The breaks in the lines create such excellint pacing and rhytm.

    I escpecially like the backwards chronology, counting down to the end.
  2. qimissung's Avatar
    Oh, you have created a work of singular beauty, Haunted. It is quite wonderful.
  3. Virgil's Avatar
    Outstanding! This is fascinating. The really short line lengths add much to this. Yes, the rhythm, the pacing, the going back in time.
  4. Haunted's Avatar
    Daniel, thanks so much for your comment. I struggled a lot with fusing the two concepts as well as getting the line breaks right. Your read is reassuring.

    Qim, thanks for your kind words. It means a lot!
  5. Haunted's Avatar
    Thanks, Virgil, I really appreciated it!!!!
    Updated 11-13-2010 at 01:47 AM by Haunted
  6. Janine's Avatar
    Fantastic poem, Haunted. I love the way the lines are short and yet flow amazingly well. It's very clever too and it just takes my breath away in the deeper meaning. I have been there and felt this same way. I can relate and you have relayed the feeling perfectly. Beautiful poem and one you should be proud of. Keep writing!
  7. Haunted's Avatar
    Thanks Janine, I'm touched by that. Actually I have stopped writing a long time ago, not likely to do it again. But so glad you enjoyed this.
  8. Janine's Avatar
    Pity, Haunted, because your writing is really superb. Don't ever say never; who knows, someday you might get up and just feel inspired to write something again. I surely hope so. I would enjoy reading it.
  9. PrinceMyshkin's Avatar
    Great ending! If sad as hell.
  10. Haunted's Avatar
    Prince thanks for the read!
    Updated 11-13-2010 at 03:45 AM by Haunted