Poems, general writings, ravings, and other things.

Hmm. Some really good lines in there Kevn. I really like the lines that begin "I am..." Their repetition adds power to it all. These lines confused me though: "The world is a stage!/And I am the puppet master!"

me too.

Hows that? ^^^

Ah if Doctor Doom ruled the world this is the poem he would write.

Better Kevin. I've noticed the openning two lines aren't solid either:
The morning wakes
A moan of outrage

Morning doesn't really wake, living beings wake. How about "The morning lifts" or something like that. A moan of outrage is kind of corny to me, though perhaps others may like it. You've got a lot of emotion packed in there toward the end. My personal preference would be to be restrained here, especially since it really doesn't contribute directly to the heart of the poem.

I was agreeing with Virgil because I had nothing productive to say.

From a literary point of view, I can see how the Morning could Wake...inanimate objects often take on human traits. In the same point...how could the morning lift? Both could work just as well. But to critique a little...from who's point of view is this told?

I want to keep the first line because I want to hint at the idea that the morning is waking without him. He has no desire to get up and continue his seemingly worthless life. The second line reinforces this. Then it progresses from worthlessness to the realization that he is his own god. He is the master of his own life. And it is told from 3rd person. A godlike figure if you will, although there is no evidence of this in the poem.
Hope that helps.

Actually I was partly thinking of this one when I posted that last message on your other blog.