Insights from a person of questionable sanity

Poem

, 03-07-2009 at 11:35 AM (2454 Views)

Girls should always be weary
of men who talk so airy
for it means by talking such sweet love
they've had much practice laying above.

(I've decided to start writing poetry! Don't know where this came from, was just writing on jonjit's wall that I mistrust men who are so poetic (like himself) ....)

p.s should that be 'lying' or 'laying'?

Updated 03-09-2009 at 01:36 PM by optimisticnad

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andave_ya - 03-07-2009 01:37 PM
lying!
TheFifthElement - 03-07-2009 02:48 PM
I like 'laying' whether it's grammatically correct or not. It leaves me with a strangely dual image of a man either b*nking or laying an egg. Either way it's funny.

I see you've been bitten by the jon bug. Uh-oh
Virgil - 03-07-2009 03:08 PM
I think it's lying, but the poem gains extra meaning when you use it as laying here. If you get my drift. So I would keep it. Well, I would like to see your poetry. It's not hard to start.
optimisticnad - 03-09-2009 07:25 AM
I prefer 'laying' too because it gets across what I mean 'laying above' - the sexual act etc. Thank you anyway.
~Sophia~ - 03-09-2009 12:20 PM
I third that. Laying works here. In my first read my eyes replaced weary with wary (not sure why) but in the second read the word weary gave it a slightly different twist. Looking forward to more!
Riesa - 03-18-2009 02:45 AM
you should be my poor dog,
"lay down" says Mike, , and I yell, "lie down!" poor dog. what shall he do? He mulls
over which cat with whom he has the most grievousness with.
Riesa - 03-18-2009 02:46 AM
or is it who?
gbrekken - 10-24-2009 02:49 AM
Lay is what you or anyone does to anyone else. To lie is another story.