Silas Thorne's Journal

I'm not a critic by any means, but I did love this very much.
I think, personally, it's one of your better works.
It flows so well. It read well. It made me think a lot. The imagery rang in my head. Nice. I'm going to re-read this a few times..

Thank you Becca! These lines have been drifting out of me for days. Happy that you enjoyed it.

Wonderful poem Silas. Did I comment on the forum? I remember reading it and I have a vague notion I did not have time to comment, but now I'm not sure. I love this very much too. Great imagery and allusions. I think the power of the poem comes from this extended sentence at the heart:

If only I was Ares to your Aphrodite
drunken Dionysus to a dancing nymph
then those imposed boundaries of the hour
would have held no meaning
that swagger-stagger path to you
would without effort knock holes in the walls
enough for love to enter,
and the one-eyed sun, brightly glaring above us,
would have faded at my presence.

That is really a brilliant sentence. The whole poem is brilliant. I think I said your last poem was your best; I take that back. This one is.

Did I comment on the forum? I remember reading it and I have a vague notion I did not have time to comment, but now I'm not sure. I love this very much too.

I'm not so sure what you mean here, but thanks for your comment, Virgil. Maybe I'm getting better with practice,or it's just a fluke.

I meant whether you had posted this in the personal poetry section of the forum threads. I take it you did not? I am getting senile you know. At least that's what my wife says.

'I did', says the man who occasionally absentmindedly tries to put his socks into the fridge, instead of the washing basket. Perhaps more sleep is required for me, yes.