Guys I nid ur help on this one.. Help me rate this

[gideeguy]

Memoirs...

Can I still write
Of stolen veteran tales
And imaginations which no one hails,
Bringin down the auto-acclaimed height?

Can I stil write
Of stiff battles won
Of medals of honor worn-
A reward of grace and might?

Can I still write
Of a queen's heart lost
And sorrow never forgot:
Tears streaming all night?

Can I still write
Of goodly pen messengers
Keeping the woods like noble rangers
With all strength and delight?

Can I still write
Of I, an emissary of the pen
Losing all to shadows in the den
Bringing down the already attained height?

[MorpheusSandman]

Rate it how? It's pretty bad; forced rhymes, awkward rhythms, thoroughly archaic, no compelling imagery or figurative language. It sounds like something Tennyson would've written as a child, but not as good.

[JBI]

2/10 at least it rhymes,ish. Despite the uneven line lengths and the choppiness.

The content is just bland.

However, you should read before posting if this is your own work, if not, please give credit where due.

[gideeguy]

Ok.. Thanks alot guys