My poem. =]

[ashley_bergman]

Heey, so this is a poem I wrote for my grandmother when she passed away. I'd really appreciate comments, be honest, I'd like to know what I can improve. Thanks.

She flew away,
like a dove in the sky.
With all of us down here,
Crying,
as we said goodbye,
We loved her dearly,
and we love her still.
She was so brave,
she had such a strong will.
She was fighting,
Right till the end,
but she couldn’t hold out,
she finally gave in.
She left in the morning,
at exactly six o-clock.
When the clouds parted,
and the rain,
finally stopped.
It was a sad time,
for all of us there.
And as we packed up our stuff,
and headed out the door,
a dove in the tree,
just sat there and stared.
In no time at all,
it was joined by another.
And while they sat there together,
I remembered my Nan.
And all the fun,
that we had.
As I watched her fly away,
with the other,
into the clouds.
I realized,
I saw god that day.