Intermission

[CdnReader]

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Intermission

Timelessness
fractures into
time spent,
time lingering,
time not-yet-here.

An anticipation hangs...
pensive, motionless, acquiescent...
an intermission in our unbroken symphony,
a drifting memory-to-be,
waiting for itself.

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[PrinceMyshkin]

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Intermission

Timelessness
fractures into
time spent,
time lingering,
time not-yet-here.

An anticipation hangs...
pensive, motionless, acquiescent...
an intermission in our unbroken symphony,
a drifting memory-to-be,
waiting for itself.

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How extraordinarily succinct! Like the poem by il penseroso, one feels the restraint you exercised, and it is a powerful element in the poem.

[firefangled]

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Intermission

Timelessness
fractures into
time spent,
time lingering,
time not-yet-here.

An anticipation hangs...
pensive, motionless, acquiescent...
an intermission in our unbroken symphony,
a drifting memory-to-be,
waiting for itself.

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cdn/31dec07
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I think you snagged it right on why it is not a good companion! :)

Give me right now anytime over tomorrow or yesterday.

It is an interesting thing you've done with memory.

[CdnReader]

How extraordinarily succinct! Like the poem by il penseroso, one feels the restraint you exercised, and it is a powerful element in the poem.

Thanks, Jer. I guess you're glad I cut out the entire middle stanza, and tossed it in the rubbish heap?? :lol:


I think you snagged it right on why it is not a good companion! :)

Give me right now anytime over tomorrow or yesterday.

It is an interesting thing you've done with memory.

Drat! Went and disproved my own disagreement!! :crash: Oh well. I'm glad you liked the poem anyways, Firefangled. :)

[SleepyWitch]

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a drifting memory-to-be,


I love this line, cdn. the whole poem is great, but this is my favourite line, it's a very neat way to describe the transience of things

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love this line, cdn. the whole poem is great, but this is my favourite line, it's a very neat way to describe the transience of things

Yes, she has nicely caught the accursed doubleness of the experience, when 99% of her wants the thing to continue to be, to be present but a nagging 1% has already consigned it to memory.

[CdnReader]

Thanks, Sleepywitch. I like that line too, actually. ;)

Jer.... even those things that continue to be have a memory, a history. That's what I had in mind, how our lives are continuing to make, be, and then become our own histories, in a never-ending cycle. :)

[AuntShecky]

Very nice!
I've often heard it said of the zen concept of the "now":
the very millisecond one thinks of "now" -- it's pffft! gone.

I'm envious of you for having written this phrase:

a drifting memory-to-be,
waiting for itself.

(I wish I could have thought of that! You are something else, Cdn!)

[CdnReader]

Oh, shucks, AuntShecky.... Thank you very much! :blush: Much of my inspiration comes from hanging out with all of the wonderful poets here at LitNet. :)