Faith

[ampoule]

Faith

I spent an hour not thinking of you today.
How could I be so careless as to waste even
the tiniest morsel of my fantasies of you?
These months,
turning into years,
beg me to forget you,
but I am a romantic dreamer
who pretends you lied.
I disregard your silence.
I try to step into your dreams
and remember them for you.
I love you so much I cannot move.
Please let me sit here on the edge and watch.

amp, April Seventh, TwoThousandTwo

[Sweets America]

This is sad, Ampoule. The line 'I love you so much I cannot move' gave me the shivers.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Faith

I spent an hour not thinking of you today.
How could I be so careless as to waste even
the tiniest morsel of my fantasies of you?
These months,
turning into years,
beg me to forget you,
but I am a romantic dreamer
who pretends you lied.
I disregard your silence.
I try to step into your dreams
and remember them for you.
I love you so much I cannot move.
Please let me sit here on the edge and watch.

I worried that the poem would not be able to live up to that killer opening line, but see that I needn't have done so as you were firmly at the wheel.

[TheFifthElement]

Is it sad day on lit-net today? Ampoule, your poem made me so, so sad (which I know you don't like to hear!), there's such a lost yet hopeful tone to it, almost like a child desperate for, but not getting, parental affection. That last line is so, so heart-rending


Please let me sit here on the edge and watch.

:bawling:

[firefangled]

Faith

I disregard your silence.
I try to step into your dreams
and remember them for you.



amp, April Seventh, TwoThousandTwo


I like this so much. The language is spare and so appropriate for being that. The magical thing about the poem is how directly you state your feeling without it being too much. That is difficult to achieve either through rewriting or pure inspiration. One way or the other you went through some serious work to get here. Bravo!

[Virgil]

This is a fine poem Amp. The language moves so smoothly and honestly. I too like the line "I love you so much I cannot move." It is a powerful line coming where it does in the poem. The title is quite interesting too. It lends itself to several meanings.

[muhsin]

I don't know why exactly but I like the poem. The languae very accessible to me as an average reader.
Keep it up!

[ampoule]

I thank you all so very much, and yes, I did go through some serious work to get here.

[Gadget Girl]

This poem is so... heartfelt. I can relate to it and I know the feeling of the person who has this feeling. I like it. Good job!

[dibyendra]

I loved this poem Amp ! :thumbs_up

I really liked these lines really powerful in your poem.



but I am a romantic dreamer




I try to step into your dreams
and remember them for you.




I love you so much I cannot move.
Please let me sit here on the edge and watch.


Please let me sit here on the edge and watch
The last line is really heartfelt one. I really felt the last line much stronger in this poem.


Good work Amp :thumbs_up !

[Pendragon]

Sitting on the edge and watching. In some parts of my life, I feel like that is all I have ever done. In other parts, the door was opened willingly. And a time or two, I slipped in through a crack... Lovely. Amp...

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[blazeofglory]

Faith

I spent an hour not thinking of you today.
How could I be so careless as to waste even
the tiniest morsel of my fantasies of you?
These months,
turning into years,
beg me to forget you,
but I am a romantic dreamer
who pretends you lied.
I disregard your silence.
I try to step into your dreams
and remember them for you.
I love you so much I cannot move.
Please let me sit here on the edge and watch.

amp, April Seventh, TwoThousandTwo

Stepping into dreams is what a true lover can do and of course no others can do, and nothing is unsurmountable to a true lover and carry on you seem to qualify for it, that is expressive of your beautiful poem.