deadly encounter

[spally]

a deadly encounter
an unexpected visit
under the stars
out here in the open
you final told me what you've come here to say
into the sea you will find me there
fly to the clouds and i will show you the way
down to the earth is where i now lay
follow my footprints until they fade
i am all and i am none
i am the earth and i am the air
with out me you would surely fade
you are mine and i yours
until the sands of time finally die
we are one and we are none
you are you and i am me
we are different yet we are the same
you are dark and i am light
without one the other would die
a deadly encounter
an unexpected visit
i have found you
and now i see
that the stars and the moon
are one and the same
you are you, and i am me
me we are one
and we are the same

[Dirt McKert]

it's decent. on this one, i would suggest some revision though.

[chmpman]

Also, not every line has to end in punctuation. It's called enjambment when a poet lets a line filter into the next without punctuation.

[Dirt McKert]

Also, not every line has to end in punctuation. It's called enjambment when a poet lets a line filter into the next without punctuation.
i was taught to use punctuation as sparsely as possible in poetry

[Xamonas Chegwe]

Punctuation in poetry is like punctuation in speech - it shows the reader where to break a long passage of words, where to breathe, where to pause. No punctuation at all is as counter-productive as too much. Punctuation is a tool; removing it altogether from your repertoire is like a carpenter deciding he will never use a plane in any future work - a little silly - like all tools, sometimes they are exactly what you need for the job in hand - sometimes not - but it's nice to have one in your toolbox just in case. :D

[Dirt McKert]

i meant basically what you just said by saying "as sparsely as possible."
i like to use it. but not much - not as much as in prose or storywriting, is what i should say.