SleepyWitch
03-14-2006, 06:32 AM
yet another poem :) i hope it's not schmaltzy or anything :)
please criticize. thanks :)
Possessed
Some days he's on my mind so much,
I know not who I am.
Turning his sorrows over in my head
I float above these smouldering limbs.
Whose pain is it I'm feeling,
a tangled mess of his and mine?
His soul reflected in my eyes,
my seething mind a mirror
of his thoughts,
I stagger through a crimson haze
and toss my blubbing heart
into a sea of madness.
Then sleep at last defeats him
and in cold dream's embraces we find
what cannot be,
relieved that while we're waking
our separate lives hold sway.
please criticize. thanks :)
Possessed
Some days he's on my mind so much,
I know not who I am.
Turning his sorrows over in my head
I float above these smouldering limbs.
Whose pain is it I'm feeling,
a tangled mess of his and mine?
His soul reflected in my eyes,
my seething mind a mirror
of his thoughts,
I stagger through a crimson haze
and toss my blubbing heart
into a sea of madness.
Then sleep at last defeats him
and in cold dream's embraces we find
what cannot be,
relieved that while we're waking
our separate lives hold sway.