PDA

View Full Version : My first poem on here, title "Tempted"



ANgrY_p03t
10-29-2003, 04:55 AM
"Tempted"

You’re eyes played me like a smooth Spanish guitar.

Skin tempted me as religion tempts the soul.

Lips teased me like the sea teases the shore.

You’re words played with my heart like a poet does to the crowd.



You didn’t even care; you just kept on going.

Pulling me in further and further into you.

Until the only way out was by pain.

Till all I would feel is the thought of being alone.



If only you knew how long I cared for you.

Wished we could have shared a smile everyday.

Walked together on the finest day of the year.

Give that kiss that would take our breath away.



But now you won’t get a chance to experience that.

The only smile that I will have, is when I forget you.

The only walk will be me in the rain, washing you away.

Never will there be a kiss, not even when I am gone forever.

Phoenix_Tears
10-29-2003, 07:50 PM
The only walk will be me in the rain, washing you away

i like this, for i can envision it in my mind.
I think you have a great talent for the written word. I could see the man and the heartbroken woman clearly in my mind. This is a very good thing indeed.