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[right_and_gone]

yeah, its a little short, but dont worry it was meant to be that way

look at his skin, cool, complex.
the lines defined in his body, he is defined in mine.
he has made me puddle in which I lay for ease each time i fall for him

right and gone

[Dyrwen]

That's quite different.. the last line seems a little hard to follow. Was it supposed to be "he has made me a puddle, in which I lay for ease, each time i fall for him"?

Deep stuff..heh.

[AbdoRinbo]

I think it's supposed to be surreal, like a Salvadore Dali painting.

[den]

I like it, the contrasts, and , `a' puddle or puddled or puddling... ;) they all work, depends on what your own emotions /feelings/experience/history / baggage project onto the words.