For Clarissa

[AnStellaR]

Poor mind that serves
My body as a host
Come late night hours
He misses you the most

He can't hold on
But he can't let go
Though the solution
Im sure you already know

Please forgive me
But I can't dwell here any longer
Because it seems the more I say
The more the hurt grows so much stronger

This enigmatic game of
Love is truly making me insane
I'm left with no other option other than to
Turn around and forget about the pain

A close relationship will
Surely render itself useless
And cause a disaster
Such a needless mess

I'm doing us a favor
Though I know you can't see it now
But I'm confident you'll find it
You were always good at that somehow

Even though I might miss out
Now I'd rather say nothing at all
But we're strong I promise and
In one piece we'll make it through it all

I won't forget you because I couldn't forget you
And when you lie restless in bed
close you're eyes and remember
Exactly eveything I've said

So don't die on me now because
I'm not leaving you forever
I just need to get away from you
To assemble myself back together

I may sound hateful and even angry
But I promise you I'm not
I'm just a little lost right now
It sucks what we once felt we both forgot

There's a permanent hole in my heart now
And I know you can always find it
So if God were to make things better
You know I'd let you in even if it hurt just a little bit

Sorry If I'm too confusing
I guess it was within God's Original Design
To make me utterly inexplicable
Yet still loving and benign

And If someday you feel alone and scared
If there's monsters under your bed or in your mind
I will be here for you to confide in
Because it's in my nature to be so kind

For a minute of my life I'd push play, stop,and then rewind
Live it over and over and never rest
To see a million things I never saw before
Because Clarissa, those times were truly the best

( I know it's not as good as the other ones i've read on here but still one of my favorites. i guess i just wanted to write something that other people could relate to :rolleyes: )

[Phoenix_Tears]

NO, don't put yourself down or feel inferior to others poetry like that. Its a horrible way to think, and for a first meeting. Your poem is one to relate to certainly. I have always liked the pattern you have a.b.a.b.a.b. but i always mess it up in the middle when i try that. What do you want to know about it though? i dont know much about you.... and i don't know how hard you like the criticism. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt because this poem seems a little personal.
Phoen-x

[AnStellaR]

well thanks for your response. i guess if thats what you really think about it then that is okay.

[Phoenix_Tears]

you sound dissapointed. do not be, continue to post and work at it. The things worth fighting for take more time and effort.
ciao
Phoen-x